Sunday, February 20, 2011

Six Sentence Sunday 2-20-11

Hello again! I'm so excited to be part of Six Sentence Sunday! It's been a lot of fun so far! This excerpt is from 'LeeAnn Vaughn: A Way With Murder' again. 

Last week, we met Arnold Longfield, a despicable, callous husband who's planning to murder his wife. This week, he's just injected her with succinylcholine. He already called 911 and carried her to the bathroom while waiting for them to respond. He plans to tell them she's suffering from an asthma attack.

He knelt down beside Lenore and looked directly into her eyes. “What’s that, dear? You can’t breathe?” He chuckled as he placed his fingers under her chin and tilted her face up towards his. “Don’t worry. An ambulance is on the way. You hang in there a little longer, okay?”

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29 comments:

J.C. Martin said...

A chilling snippet! Good one!

kayspringsteen said...

With husbands like that...makes me relieved I'm single! Great work here. Since I have asthma, this made me reaching for my inhaler just in case!

Chrystalla said...

Interesting, I wonder in whose point of view this is...

onmiownnow2 said...

It's from the point of view of the woman's husband. He's the murderer.

Arlene said...

Love how you shown so much cruelty, sociopathic behavior with a tilt of the chin. I'm hooked.

JoAnne Kenrick said...

That's really creepy, the way he chuckles and pretends like he can't hear her. Gave me a shiver.

Sarah Grimm said...

Evil bastard, isn't he? Nice six!

Liz said...

Pure insane evil!

Eleri Stone said...

He gets extra creepy marks for mocking his wife while he's murdering her.

heatherthurmeier said...

Isn't he a nasty one! Great snippet.

Lisa Fox said...

Totally chilling and evil! I love it!

Kerrianne Coombes said...

Oh wicked! I love this. Well done! Chilling!

Laurel Kriegler said...

Chuckled??? awful man!

Lynne Murray said...

Great suspenseful six!

ada-hoffmann said...

Ooo, what a bastard!

Jayel Kaye said...

yikes, He is one bad dude

Taryn Kincaid said...

Despicable villain!

(Although the Kenny Rogers in the background does kind of make me inadvertently giggle.)

Casi said...

He is not nice, laughing while she's choking. How did he actually kill her? You completely skipped that part.

Bianca Swan said...

One word comes to mind--more.

Lauri J Owen said...

Oh no! Hope she nails him good!

Laurie A. Green said...

He's evil. I hope he gets what he deserves before the conclusion in the story. (I'm sure that's the plan.)

Marsha A. Moore said...

Intriguing evil character! Fantastic job getting his twisted personality across.

Hailey Edwards said...

You handled this chilling excerpt very well.

diannehartsock said...

Cold, evil man. Wow.

Ella Drake said...

Eeeeep!

(okay, this is funny, my word verification is "crones". He may be a man, but he's acting like an old witchy witch)

Miranda Buchanan said...

Nice snippet. I mean super creepy and I could feel the tension. Nice job.

Lex Valentine said...

Evil, evil man.

Trish said...

Very cold, chilling, snippet. Great six capturing your villian's character.

Pippa Jay said...

Oh, hang in Lenore!